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托福写作常见的写作误区有哪些?

时间:2019-12-23 10:43来源:江苏朗阁外语培训中心 作者:toby

  托福写作有哪些写作误区?如果您想知道的话,这篇文章可不要错过,下面就和南京托福培训小编一起分析下吧。

  1. 开头结尾写太长

  官方标准中根本没有要求如何写开头结尾,所以开头结尾多写字并不能帮助提高分数。满分标准中有一句•Effectively addresses the topic and task.,也就是说让我们用最少的字展现更多扣题的信息。因此,开头结尾写太长会造成啰嗦,重复,衔接不明的错误。如果出现啰嗦,重复,衔接不明的错误,最高只能达到24分。对应的评分标准: •Displays unity, progression, and coherence, though it may contain occasional redundancy, digression, or unclear connections.

  题目

  In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

  学生开头

  Given the increasing number of people concerning about the job on the internet, the question whether it is harder to identify the job which can bring a secure and successful future nowadays arouses a heated debate among people. While some people disagree with this statement, my observations tell me that the answer is yes. And I will present some reasons and examples in the passage below.

  老师开头(开头可以不写背景句,直接写)

  It is undeniable that modern society provides more jobs. However, there exists the perception that it was easier to identify a successful and secure career in the past. For me, I completely agree with this point of view.

  学生结尾:

  To sum up, both the development and the average level of awareness make the job hunting situation much better than before. With more sophisticated social security today, people will no longer worry about their basic living and natural move to the next step, thinking about the desire deep in heart which their educational level can help a lot. All of these positive factors today can help young people to identify a suitable career and successful future will show as long as they keep sailing toward their dreams.

  老师结尾(结尾重申观点就可以了,并且可以简单给一个理由,避免重复就可以)

  In conclusion, it was easier to identify a promising and secure career in the past, because things in the past were more predictable.

  2. 写了一个字数较少,且反方发展不均的让步段。

  官方标准从来都没有明确要求写让步段,所以托福最佳写法都是不写让步段。如果非要写让步段,也要保证让步段有充分的发展,必须也要有例子,但不需要反驳。官方标准中从来没有要求反驳,如果你写了让步段,意味着你的观点不完全支持自己的看法,也有偏向反方的时候,你的观点就是mostly agree 或mostly disagree。 发展不重复就会犯4分的错误,•Addresses the topic and task well, though some points may not be fully elaborated.即使其他段落再好, 一段字数写的太少,或发展缺乏细节例子,内容空洞,最高不超过24分。

  题目

  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

  Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom.

  学生让步段:

  Admittedly, opponents could insist that public statement about society or politics can broaden students’ horizon and help them have a more comprehensive understanding to public events. 举例,However, in my opinion, better choices for teachers are giving some relative assignments and having a deep communication with students in a private space. Furthermore, students will foster their critical thinking ability by collecting information, evaluating pros and cons by their own in social and political fields.

  老师让步段:(即使写让步段,也要和主体段有一样的充分的发展。)

  Admittedly, through showing objective views on social or political issues, teachers can let students have the opportunity to know social or political issues. This is important because students now spend most of their time on entertainment, almost having zero interest for the society. When a teacher talks some social issues such as, the growing gap between the rich and the poor, the legalization of marijuana, or gun control, students may start to think about these issues, and form their own opinions based on critical thinking. Consequently, when students become voters, they can elect a suitable leader, according to their understanding of the society, rather than the appearance or good words of the candidate. So, I can understand why some people may have optimistic attitude towards teachers’ views.

  满分标准:•Is well organized and well developed, using clearly appropriate explanations, exemplifications and/or details. 解释是可有可无的,有例子就可以保证说详细的内容,减少抽象内容的重复。

  3. 追求花哨的词句,但内容跑题,或只有抽象的解释,没有细节.

  满分标准中确实要求准确,多样的词汇和语法,•Displays consistent facility in the use of language, demonstrating syntactic variety, appropriate word choice, and idiomaticity, though it may have minor lexical or grammatical errors但这些词汇是为更好展现内容回答问题而存在的。所以,只要保证语言的准确,且不重复,就能满足满分要求,不需要刻意追求,语法难度和词汇的复杂度。

  题目:

  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

  Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom.

  学生主体段:

  Secondly, students should build social or political views through their own experiences, not through others opinions. I understand that everyone have rights to show their attitude, but it would be better to talk about their political views in other place. If teachers talk about their opinions too much, students would be effected by them in some parts. For example, I used to study with a teacher who always showed the negative sides of the world to us. It made everyone in his class so uncomfortable and some students are easily influent by him which made very bad influence among students. Then, our school realize this problem and changed this teacher. However, some students who were positive before still show the negative attitude even without his class. So I think teachers should better not make their social or political views known to students because it will make them very unprofessional. 本段论点没有明确给出老师观点能带来的好坏,例子笼统,没有提及任何具体的老师的opinion是什么, 内容重复,笼统,符合3分(18分)的特征•Address the topic and task using somewhat developed explanations, exemplifications , and/or details.貌似发展,段落最后给了一些无关建议,与论点和题目内容关系不大。本题要求讨论老师观点的价值,应不应该表达观点就是要体现老师的观点是否有什么积极价值,所以论证内容直接展示老师观点是否有正面价值就可以了。说其他内容都有跑题啰嗦的嫌疑。

  老师主体段:

  First, teachers’ radical views may make students have prejudice against certain people. For instance, in Japan, during a history class, when teaching the history of American Civil War, the lecturer may argue that black people are inherently inferior to other races. He may back up his argument by pointing out that black people are barbaric because they participated in some genocide and criminal activities. When hearing these comments and evidence, students may have bias towards black people. Similar scenario happened in Nazi Germany, before and during the World War Two, German students were taught that Jewish people were inferior and they needed to be exterminated. 题目问的是老师的观点,所以例子要体现老师的观点具体是什么,这样才是扣题。打擦边球都不可能高分的。通过具体的例子,来展现多样的词汇和语法结构,避免抽象语言可能带来的重复。

  4. 用语文写英文作文。

  语文的特点就是一顿乱写,把人绕懵, 显得自己很高明,自欺欺人, 不明事理的人也很崇拜。但托福写作的写作结构很简单,就是论点+解释+举例。难点在于能否保证论点,解释,举例都相关。只要你语言简洁易懂,用直白通俗的语言表述一般都可以避免中式英语。化语文写作为英文写作。

  5. 以前考过27, 下次就也能27或更高。

  写作有很大的不确定性,因为每次出的题目都会不同,如果遇到不熟悉的题目就会跑题,就不可能高分。所以为了保证有更大可能取得高分,考前最少要写30篇独立,保证对各种话题有足够熟悉,并且保证每篇独立的水平满足满分要求。可以作弊达到,如果你作弊都写不出一篇满分作文,你永远都不可能满分。

  6. 学了多年,就应该高分。

  学了多年要看你怎么学,三天打鱼两天晒网,等于没学。一年连一篇作文都没写过,这不是学了一年,是根本都没学。写作要按照官方评分标准去写,而不是道听途说或者按自己感觉写。满足要求才可以。

  7. 考过GRE, TOFEL也应该满分

  GRE你考了多少分呢?是不是也就2.5, 3这个样子,这个水平对应托福,也就24左右最多,20左右都正常。不是说你参加了一个高级考试,低级考试一定就很了不起。不管参加什么考试,没按考试要求去答题,都不可能高分。


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